My 1st Constanza
This is not a poem as such... I'm writing these lines off the cuff and tipsy off the stronger stuff. I simply can't be bothered much when my head is heavy and tired... when I'm so bloody uninspired... As my fingers firm table clutch, I realize I might collapse; my concentration's long since lapsed... I know this excuse is a crutch; it does not justify a thing; but, gosh, it's hard two words to string... Perhaps drink less... At least a touch until I'm done with my writing... But... That bottle's so inviting! This is not a poem as such... I simply can't be bothered much. As my fingers firm table clutch, I know this excuse is a crutch; Perhaps drink less... At least a touch?
- five or more 3-line stanzas;
- each line has a set meter of eight syllables;
- the first lines of all the stanzas can be read successively as an independent poem, with the rest of the poem weaved in to express a deeper meaning;
- the first lines convey a theme written in monorhyme;
- the second and third lines of each stanza rhyme together;
- rhyme scheme: a/b/b, a/c/c, a/d/d, a/e/e, a/f/f… etc.
At d’Verse, poets were prompted to write poems in the form of a ‘Constanza’.
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73 thoughts on “Under control, or: Under advisement”
Ha… not sure if I can trust that you were drunk writing this poem unless you dipped too much into the Margaritas offered at the bar.
🍸 Björn 🍸
I loved your poem and this form!
💞 Pragalbha 💞
David…clever and delightful! ❤️
💝 Punam 💝
LOL…you managed well enough in spite of (or because of) the bottle, David!
💖 Lynn 💖
I love your Constanza David. 💙 It cheered me up after a hard week! At least you are not under pressure. 😊
💜 💛 Filipa 💛 💜
Haha! I’d say bottoms up again. You have to give in sometimes. 🙂
🥃😁 Terveen 😁🥃
For off the cuff, not bad. Cheers! 😉
💗 Lisa 💗
Excellent! Come on buddy, we need to drink and sing!
🤍 💛 Harshi 💛 🤍
Haha! Love this, David. … Drunken words or … drunk on words?! Despite the sad undertones, this one also gave me a smile 💕🙂
🧡 Harmony 🧡
Love the tone of this poem . ‘I simply can’t be bothered much’ – Ha! Not fooled by that statement!
💜 💚 Marion 💚 💜