"I'd be more useful dead." "At least they'd get the money." "Hell, at least I would finally be free." "Mouths at home would get fed." "So sad, it's almost funny." "My children? Nah, they have no need for me." "Construction doesn't pay." "Ain't no help for a brother." "There's only one way out that I can see." "I'm ne'er home anyway." "They would still have their mother." "And... honestly? She'd probably agree."
- 12 lines made up of 4 tercets;
- syllabic: 6/7/10 per line;
- rhymed: rhyme scheme abc abc dec dec.
The above kerf was written for Colleen M. Chesebro’s ‘Tanka Tuesday’ prompt: Poets were prompted to write syllabic poems based on the theme of ‘useful’.
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48 thoughts on “Familiar, or: Family man”
The seperation of life and reality. Death does not always accomplish what the deceased wished – even when there is a will.
So true, Jules 💔
Very sad that someone should feel that the money from their death, although bringing material comfort for their family would compensate them for their loss.Poignant David..xx
Yes, it’s truly heartbreaking, Sally 😦 – it’s a real phenomenon
Very movingly evoked 💙
💓 D. A. 💓 ~ thanks!
So sad that the thought is that he doesn’t matter. Have you been watching “A Wonderful Life”?
Nope, but I have met people with this mentality
That was powerful, David! I just want to give that person a hug. Great poem! 🙂
🤗 😘 Yvette 🤗 😘
Interesting form! Your style works so well to convey the emotions.
💘 Sarah, thank you 💘
Man, that’s dark. Real
😢 Steven 😢
That’s a sad story David. We need to make sure we tell those we love how important they are to us. It’s not always obvious, despite what we think. (K)
💙 💜 Kerfe 💜 💙 ~ exactly