It’s better to look at the sky than live there. Such an empty place; so vague. Just a country where the thunder goes.–Truman Capote (1924 – 1984), Breakfast at Tiffany’s and Three Stories
unbounded in a boy's eyes unbounded by societal norms by truisms, by words, by my own eyes, by contrary evidence unbounded by - empty of reality empty of understanding empty of empathy we're cloudless, their eyes said, cloudless, clear, cogent true, trustworthy, trust us, trust us for everything, on everything, look to us for everything look no further, not skyward, nor - are you listening to us are you paying attention, boy are you disrespecting us are you doubting us, boy - ignorance clouds your thinking clouds your mind clouds your eyes; you cannot trust anything other than our cloudless vision look up at us, not past us to the sky; we tower in every possible way trust us
Eugi’s Weekly Prompt
d’Verse poetics prompt: Breakfast at Tiffany’s
At d’Verse, poets were prompted to select one of eleven lines from Truman Capote’s ‘Breakfast at Tiffany’s’ as inspiration to pen original poems.
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53 thoughts on “Cloudless, or: Unbounded”
I like the repetition and parallel structure in your lines. And the straightforward language makes this a powerful poem. Good job! 😀
💕 Richard 💕
I really think you’ve out done yourself! This is such a wonderful study of the generational dynamic!!
💘 Muri 💘
Very well done David
💛🙏🏻💛 Lauren 💛🙏🏻💛
Beautifully constructed with the repetition of words (unbounded, empty, clouds) to echo the message.
💞 thanks, Grace 💞
An interesting, thought provoking piece. Well done.
🤎 Arcadia 🤎 ~ thanks!
Trust us–dangerous words. A truly insightful piece. (K)
❤️ Kerfe ❤️
This is a beautiful, raw take on forced compliance.
💙 Desiree 💙 ~ thanks so much
David, you laid out much of the world’s societal woes in a most eloquent way. I don’t really have the words to express how much I love this piece. Bravo!
The comment by coalblack is spot on.
🤍 Eugi 🤍 ~ thank you
As Shay says, this is a disconcerting poem. It is very strong.
💛 thanks, Kim! 💛
This is incredibly hard-hitting and evocative. A difficult subject matter addressed well, David.
💖 Sanaa 💖
One of your best David. It’s jagged and raw, with so much that is said between the lines.
💓 Linda 💓
This is disconcerting because it describes an interplay that is so common and so fraught for so many reasons. Not an easy thing to describe as well as you have managed, here.
💘 thanks, Shay 💘