Right to left, or: Left to right

A ‘Loop’ poem

He'd wow his friends with sleight of hand;
Hand over hand, too fast for eyes;
Eyes sparkling, lift large plastic cup,
Cup crimson sponge of golf ball size.

Fanned playing cards from right to left;
Left stunned, the audience would delight,
Delight in wondrous magic tricks,
Tricks few could do exactly right.

Spiting his folks, he quit law school;
School of hard knocks suited him well;
Well, so he had convinced himself,
Himself caught ~ in a magic spell.

Loop poetry

  • No restrictions on the number of stanzas, nor on the syllable count for each line;
  • In each stanza, which is four lines long, the last word of the first line becomes the first word of the second line; the last word of the second line becomes the first word of the third line; and the last word of the third line becomes the first word of the fourth.
    • This is followed for each stanza.
  • The rhyme scheme is abcb.

For more on ‘Loop poems’ click here.

d’Verse prompt: Loop poetry

At d’Verse, poets were encouraged to try their hands at writing ‘Loop’ poems.

Let’s write poetry together!

When it comes to partnership, some humans can make their lives alone – it’s possible. But creatively, it’s more like painting: you can’t just use the same colours in every painting. It’s just not an option. You can’t take the same photograph every time and live with art forms with no differences.

Ben Harper (b. 1969)

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37 thoughts on “Right to left, or: Left to right”

  1. I can empathise with you on that score my friend! It can be tough to shake off, canโ€™t it?! That feeling of being a disappointment. Itโ€™s why we write isnโ€™t it?!

  2. You used the form so well to tell the juggler-magician’s story.
    Ah that he never finished law school is a bugger, really
    After his passion, something solid to fall back on
    Hope the streets shall remeber him, well

      1. Sublime David and utterly enjoyable! ๐Ÿ‘๐Ÿ‘Œ๐Ÿ‘๐Ÿ˜ You caught us all in your magic word shaped skills! ๐Ÿ˜Ž๐Ÿ˜‰๐Ÿ˜ I can relate to the parental disappointment in oneโ€™s career choices, in a small way, not with my mum who always encouraged me to do what makes me happy! ๐Ÿ˜ But initially with my father who wanted a pensionable job for me.

  3. Love the treatment of this subject. Too many are forced to navigate higher education when they would prefer more mundane careers (ones that don’t require a 4 year degree)!

  4. This was fan-tastic David. Wonderful subject matter, and superbly rendered. Was there a bit of autobiography in there my friend?

  5. You are bang on with loopiness, and I enjoyed the ride. Don’t see many of those guys out on the street anymore.

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