Wisps whirl, or: Rumbles growl

An Octelle

Swells, lulls, ripples, captivating;
Lazy drifting, bobbing, waiting;
Wisps whirl far as eye can see;
Fluffy duvet soothes rough sea;
Rumbles growl into great roar;
Tumble, rise, gasp, more-more-more!
Swells, lulls, ripples, captivating;
Lazy drifting, bobbing, waiting


  • eight lines using personification and symbolism in a telling manner;
  • syllabic: 8, 8, 7, 7, 7, 7, 8, 8
  • rhyming: A1/A2/b/b/c/c/A1/A2;
  • the first two lines and the last two lines are identical.


At d’Verse, poets were encouraged to employ the ‘Octelle’ form.

Moonwashed Weekly Challenge


Let’s write poetry together!

When it comes to partnership, some humans can make their lives alone – it’s possible. But creatively, it’s more like painting: you can’t just use the same colours in every painting. It’s just not an option. You can’t take the same photograph every time and live with art forms with no differences.

Ben Harper (b. 1969)

Would you like to create poetry with me and have a completed poem of yours featured here at the Skeptic’s Kaddish? I am very excited to have launched the ‘Poetry Partners’ initiative and am looking forward to meeting and creating with you… Check it out!

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