An ‘Amanda’s Pinch’ poem
Her daughter, a doctor, stays always by her side. A collapsed lung has landed her at hospital. Please, let it be pneumonia, we pray, Though cancer consumes her body. Though cancer consumes her body, My aunt cherishes every single day. Her will's not been whittled, not even a little, Constantly fighting to live, constantly clear-eyed.
Murisopsis’ Poetry Scavenger Hunt
This ‘Amanda’s Pinch’ poem was written for Murisopsis’ Poetry Scavenger Hunt.
Amanda’s Pinch?
- syllabic: 12/12/10/8/8/10/12/12
- rhyming: a/b/c/D/D/c/b/a (with line 5 a refrain of line 4)
- alliteration required in every line
- it looks well centered.
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–Ben Harper (b. 1969)
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Sickness can be the worst. I pray that she finds her peace…
๐๐๐ป Terveen ๐๐ป๐
A wonderful tribute to your aunt. Prayers for her and her family….
๐ค๐๐ป Stephanie ๐๐ป๐ค
Loved it David.
๐ thanks, Shashi ๐
I pray she wins her war with cancer.
She’s at stage 4, and she’s running out of options ๐
That is so hard.
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A hard road for all. And a beautiful spirit. Sending best, K.
๐๐๐ป Kerfe ๐๐ป๐
oh goodness this is just so heartbreaking โฆ. *hugs*
๐๐๐ป CC ๐๐ป๐
Wonderful expression of the angst of illness and the will to live. A universal emotion and an event we can all relate to… Thanks for playing with the scavenger hunt and especially this poem!
โค thanks, Muri โค
I really admire the expression of her will
In all honestly
This disposition, ain’t easy at all.
๐๐๐ป Abi ๐๐ป๐
Tough man ๐
not me… I wouldn’t bear so much suffering.
People who are inside of the disease hole, must summon their innermost to express the outward glow
*nods*
Constantly clear-eyed
The way to face you home and loved ones everyday
Although for flip sake
It is flipping hard.
๐๐๐ป Abi ๐๐ป๐ ~ so hard
On the inside really tough to hold it all together.
yep. I am blown away by her.
So hard to see a loved one go through thisโฆ
๐ข Judy ๐ข ~ yes, it is. Thank you.
Oh Davidโฆ๐ You know how much this one resonates me. Lung, just like my mother. ๐
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In my aunt’s case, it wasn’t originally lung cancer ~ it was breast cancer, but it’s spread throughout her body ~ into her bones, lungs, etc…
I’m thinking of you & your mom too, Filipa โค
Oh David, it’s exactly the same with my mother. She had two breast cancers and the second one has spreaded all over her body (lungs, brain, liver, bones…). Damn it!
๐ Filipa ๐
I hope your auntie isn’t suffering. I’m thinking of her and all your family too. ๐
*hug*