A pantoum
Car crashed sailing along dreamway Wheels spun around through misty breeze Hark! He heard panicked krill swarms say Ducking, dropped down to hands and knees Wheels spun around through misty breeze Whipped drops of water slapped his face Ducking, dropped down to hands and knees Wreckage, much needed hiding place Whipped drops of water slapped his face Streams thick with flotsam in its wake Wreckage, much needed hiding place Frozen, felt all existence shake Streams thick with flotsam in its wake Lanes rippling, cracking with sheer force Frozen, felt all existence shake Torn rolling landscape, foamy, coarse Lanes rippling, cracking with sheer force Hark! He heard panicked krill swarms say Torn rolling landscape, foamy, coarse Car crashed sailing along dreamway
W3 poetry prompt
This poem was written for Aditi Sharma’s W3 poetry prompt this week, which was to compose a pantoum on the theme of something dreamy, non-existent in the real world, or your real-life dreams.
For information about the ‘pantoum’ poetry form, click here.
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The Skeptic's Kaddish ๐ฎ๐ฑ 
What a nightmare! The sort you wake up from in a cold sweat. Wonderfully vivid.
๐ฑ๐๐ป Marion ๐๐ป๐ฑ
Wonderful, this is interesting and well worded.
๐๐๐ป Amelia ๐๐ป๐ ~ thanks so much!
Such a beautiful and fun poem. I could picture all this happening!
โค๏ธ๐๐ป Aditi ๐๐ปโค๏ธ ~ thanks for the prompt!
My pleasure! โค
I love the Pantoum and this one has the lilting rhythm of the waves! A terrifying dream but fascinating too…
๐ค๐๐ป Muri ๐๐ป๐ค
You make every form your own. (K)
๐ค๐๐ป Kerfe ๐๐ป๐ค ~ doesn’t everyone?
Actually not.
Vividly and wonderfully done, David. I hope that this was not a real event.
๐งธ Suzette ๐งธ ~ just a surreal dream sequence, that’s all, but it is based upon real dreams, which I’ve had.
Fabulous!
Definitely feels/reads like a dream sequence. Good job.
๐งก๐๐ป Danial ๐๐ป๐งก
That last line said it all! Great piece! Have a wonderful day!
๐๐๐ป Sara-Loretta ๐๐ป๐