can't blame the agent station's hummin' right as rain can't blame the porter jus' followin' instructions can't blame the switchman he's professional as they come can't blame the driver timely, uneventful ride gotta blame myself shoulda checked the track number shoulda noticed the sunset
The most intricate Japanese Poetry form is the Choka, or Long Poem. The early form consisted of a series of katauta joined together. This gives a choice of form structures of 5/7/5/5/7/7… etc., or: 5/7/7/5/7… etc.
The Choka could be any total line length and indeed many exceeded 100 lines. Looking at this, it is easy to see why Poetic Historians believe the katauta is the original basic unit of Japanese poetry using either the 17 or 19 unit onji.
d’Verse Quadrille #161
The above choka is my take on d’Verse’s Quadrille challenge.
The Quadrille is simply a poem of 44 words (excluding the title), and it can take any form. This week’s challenge was to use the word “track” in a Quadrille.
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61 thoughts on “Signs, or: Symbols”
We can so easily get distracted by our daydreaming David, I’ve been there before unfortunately. Wonderful tale here my friend, thank you.🙂✌🏼❤️
🤎🙏🏻 Rob 🙏🏻🤎
I love this on so many levels! ‘Tis all those levels that make this a masterpiece. Wonderful Quadrille, David.
💙🙏🏻 Susan 🙏🏻💙
Yes, we can, indeed, blame ourselves for most mishaps that occur in our lives.
You are consistently educating me and others on unique forms of poetry. Thank you.
💜🙏🏻 Brandon 🙏🏻💜
this is fantastic! I loved it! ❤
❤ Carol Anne ❤ ~ thank you so much!
💛🙏🏻 Bridget 🙏🏻💛
sunsets distract us all. great read
🤎🙏🏻 Roger 🙏🏻🤎
Luv the twist to a point of view at the end. Nice one!
💘 Gillena 💘 ~ thank you!
Yeah, I once unknowingly arrived half-an-hour late for my train, waited another half-hour (assuming my train was late) and rode for about an hour before the conductor set me straight. Great write; Thanks.
😜🙏🏻 Ron 😜🙏🏻 ~ that’s such a bummer!
Where was your mind wandering! 🤭
🚉 🤍 Punam 🤍 🚉
Ooops! I hope this isn’t a real experience, David.
Thank you for your poem!
😜🙏🏻 Merril 🙏🏻😜
I have to say I agree… and I have been there and done that… wrong airport for instance.
💓🙏🏻 Björn 🙏🏻💓
Hehe! I was supposed to drive east. It didn’t penetrate my distracted mind that the setting sun was in my eyes until I started looking for my sunglasses. Then I was looking for an off ramp!! On a train – well that is a pickle!
💕🤭 Muri 🤭💕