A Choka
can't blame the agent station's hummin' right as rain can't blame the porter jus' followin' instructions can't blame the switchman he's professional as they come can't blame the driver timely, uneventful ride gotta blame myself shoulda checked the track number shoulda noticed the sunset
Choka?
The most intricate Japanese Poetry form is the Choka, or Long Poem. The early form consisted of a series of katauta joined together. This gives a choice of form structures of 5/7/5/5/7/7โฆ etc., or: 5/7/7/5/7โฆ etc.
The Choka could be any total line length and indeed many exceeded 100 lines. Looking at this, it is easy to see why Poetic Historians believe the katauta is the original basic unit of Japanese poetry using either the 17 or 19 unit onji.
d’Verse Quadrille #161
The above choka is my take on dโVerseโs Quadrille challenge.
The Quadrille is simply a poem of 44 words (excluding the title), and it can take any form. This weekโs challenge was to use the word โtrackโ in a Quadrille.
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Excellent chลka, David. ๐
๐งก๐๐ป Colleen ๐๐ป๐งก
practicing mindfulness is always a good message in poetry!! ๐ Catchy rhythm, the Choka is cool! ๐๐
โค Tricia โค ~ it is cool! It’s really grown on me ๐
Thanks!
David
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Brilliantly done David! I must try a Choka sometime soon.
โค thanks, Kim! โค ~ they're fun – I really enjoy this form, actually!
Ha! This is brilliant David! ๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐
๐ค๐๐ป Ken ๐๐ป๐ค
Wow I love this poem! ๐
A choka! I must learn all about this.
๐๐๐ป Lesley ๐๐ป๐
Great take on the prompt, David! Always check the track number and always notice the sunset! Sadly, your poem would not work in the UK at the moment, with all of our intermittent rail strikes.
๐ค๐๐ป Kim ๐๐ป๐ค ~ that’s so annoying! Sorry to hear that.
Were you daydreaming at the train station ?
No ๐
This was mostly metaphorical
Oh, I thought you sat out in the cold after you missed your train.
Love this David. ๐
๐๐๐ป Sadje ๐๐ป๐
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Haha…shoulda coulda…that’s life…in its funniest. Enjoyed reading!
๐๐๐ป Sangeetha ๐๐ป๐
The best thing about trains is that there’s always another one… Good poem.
๐ โบ๏ธ Lisa โบ๏ธ ๐
Lovely poem.
๐๐๐ป Arcadia ๐๐ป๐
โshoulda checked the track number shoulda noticed the sunsetโ, oh well, why not spend the night here?
๐คญ๐๐ป Jim ๐๐ป๐คญ