Innocence lies, or: Winter waits

A ‘Diablo’ poem

Children's laughter rings from the street
Spring's much absorbed by summer's heat
Innocence lies
I feel myself betrayed by youth
A father's love can't shade the truth
Although it tries

Eyes open, I know love deceives
Sure as the rainbows of the leaves
Sly sin of fate's
With passing years, I autumn more
Having accepted what's in store
My winter waits

Diablo?

  • A poem of two, six-line, iambic stanzas.
  • Each stanza:
    • Lines 1,2,4 and 5, iambic tetrameter with rhymes at syllables 6 and 8.
    • Lines 3 and 6, iambic dimeter with rhymes at syllables 2 and 4.
  • Rhyme scheme:
    • (a,b)(a,b)(c,d)(e,f)(e,f)(c,d)
    • (g,h)(g,h)(i,j)(k,l)(k,l)(i,j)

W3 poetry prompt

This ‘Diablo’ poem was written for Steven S. Wallace’s W3 poetry prompt this week, which is to read Emily Dickinson’s ‘Superiority to Fate’ and then write a poem!


Moonwashed weekly prompt

Autumn


Let’s write poetry together!

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Ben Harper (b. 1969)

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44 thoughts on “Innocence lies, or: Winter waits”

  1. quite profound your weave of words David.
    โ€œI autumn more
    Having accepted whatโ€™s in store
    My winter waitsโ€
    Some fairy tales are worth the wait of truth.. xo ๐Ÿ’—

  2. A wonderfully written and relatable piece, David. Your words flow beautifully and love your unique lines “Sly sin of fate’s With passing years, I autumn more”.

      1. Iโ€™m still foolish, so I donโ€™t feel betrayed at all. Although now I know just how very much I donโ€™t know. But Iโ€™ve always been clueless.

      2. Me thinks you berate yourself ,Youth tends not to be wise,that would spoil the fun. I’ve Autumned into near Winter’s Snow. Up to my knees in coming Age.

  3. โ€œI Autumn moreโ€ฆโ€ โ€œsly sin of fatesโ€. Powerful way of describing the aging process dude. ๐Ÿ‘๐Ÿ‘๐Ÿ‘๐Ÿ‘๐Ÿ‘Œ๐Ÿ‘ŒDonโ€™t we all feel ourselves betrayed by youth?! ๐Ÿ™

  4. I wish that we could shuffle the seasons, like a deck of cards!

    We canโ€™t protect each other (or ourselves) from the past.

    Thanks for sharing your thoughtful words. ๐Ÿ™๐Ÿป

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