A ‘Diablo’ poem
Children's laughter rings from the street
Spring's much absorbed by summer's heat
Innocence lies
I feel myself betrayed by youth
A father's love can't shade the truth
Although it tries
Eyes open, I know love deceives
Sure as the rainbows of the leaves
Sly sin of fate's
With passing years, I autumn more
Having accepted what's in store
My winter waits
Diablo?
- A poem of two, six-line, iambic stanzas.
- Each stanza:
- Lines 1,2,4 and 5, iambic tetrameter with rhymes at syllables 6 and 8.
- Lines 3 and 6, iambic dimeter with rhymes at syllables 2 and 4.
- Rhyme scheme:
- (a,b)(a,b)(c,d)(e,f)(e,f)(c,d)
- (g,h)(g,h)(i,j)(k,l)(k,l)(i,j)
W3 poetry prompt
This ‘Diablo’ poem was written for Steven S. Wallace’s W3 poetry prompt this week, which is to read Emily Dickinson’s ‘Superiority to Fate’ and then write a poem!
Moonwashed weekly prompt
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–Ben Harper (b. 1969)
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The Skeptic's Kaddish ๐ฎ๐ฑ 
quite profound your weave of words David.
โI autumn more
Having accepted whatโs in store
My winter waitsโ
Some fairy tales are worth the wait of truth.. xo ๐
๐๐๐ป Cindy ๐๐ป๐
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The diablo is devilish for sure but like Emily Dickinson you triumph!
๐๐๐ป Muri ๐๐ป๐
A wonderfully written and relatable piece, David. Your words flow beautifully and love your unique lines “Sly sin of fate’s With passing years, I autumn more”.
Excellent.
๐๐๐ป Molly ๐๐ป๐
Powerfully, sadly, relatable
๐๐๐ป Angela ๐๐ป๐
Do you really feel betrayed by youth? I can’t get my mind around that. (K)
Yes, by my foolish naivetรฉ back then
Iโm still foolish, so I donโt feel betrayed at all. Although now I know just how very much I donโt know. But Iโve always been clueless.
Fair enough โบ๏ธ
But of course now you’ve got me thinking about the concept of betrayal….
๐ค Kerfe ๐ค
Me thinks you berate yourself ,Youth tends not to be wise,that would spoil the fun. I’ve Autumned into near Winter’s Snow. Up to my knees in coming Age.
๐งก๐๐ป Andrew ๐๐ป๐งก
Fabulous piece, David. โA fatherโs love canโt shade the truthโ- Wow๐
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Oohโฆ so true for so many!
๐๐๐ป Annette ๐๐ป๐
So wonderful that you have the courage to write about it.
Truly admirable
๐๐๐ป Abi ๐๐ป๐
Powerful expression of haunting truth…”I autumn more…” Amazing work David. Bravo!!
๐๐๐ป Suzette ๐๐ป๐
โI Autumn moreโฆโ โsly sin of fatesโ. Powerful way of describing the aging process dude. ๐๐๐๐๐๐Donโt we all feel ourselves betrayed by youth?! ๐
๐๐๐ป Ken ๐๐ป๐ ~ indubitably
I wish that we could shuffle the seasons, like a deck of cards!
We canโt protect each other (or ourselves) from the past.
Thanks for sharing your thoughtful words. ๐๐ป
๐ Aspen ๐ ~ thank you!
~David