Blank verse in iambic pentameter
My sky is dark with black stars; together,
congealing into thick syrup, even
as I spread my arms; distributed as
sick party favors, mementos of... need;
perhaps, perhaps, preferable to my
own; their deafening silence clotting my
ears, coursing through twisted creases, pooling
in my eyes, heavy, streaming down my cheeks,
weighing me down, collapsing, moaning, to
my knees, my hands clenching, begging for words,
cutting, digging, biting words, to somehow
pierce through the silence I've come to desire.
d’Verse Open Link Night
For today’s d’Verse OLN, I’m sharing this poem that I wrote just over one year ago, when I was experimenting with blank verse.
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When it comes to partnership, some humans can make their lives alone – it’s possible. But creatively, it’s more like painting: you can’t just use the same colours in every painting. It’s just not an option. You can’t take the same photograph every time and live with art forms with no differences.
–Ben Harper (b. 1969)
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A dark moment vividly described, David! โค Wishing you peace and joy in 2023.
๐ค๐๐ป Cheryl ๐๐ป๐ค ~ you too!
iambic pentameter can be rather heavy handed (no pun intended) but you soften in up nicely in this poem, well done david.
๐งก๐๐ป Phillip ๐๐ป๐งก ~ that is very kind; thanks!
These sound like the words of a man who’s been through an ordeal. It’s raw and very well written.
–Shay
๐๐๐ป Shay ๐๐ป๐ ~ thanks so much!
The metaphor of syrup… I can see this, understand it … i like how the very thing it’s trying to get at, to abolish, is something the person doesn’t want to give up even though maybe its for the better…
๐๐๐ป Margaret ๐๐ป๐ ~ thanks! I like how you put that!
Sometimes it is so hard to quiet our minds.
๐๐๐ป Linda ๐๐ป๐
David, I’m clapping in iambic pentameter, but I wouldn’t call your emotive verse “blank.”
I’d call it worth meditating on, at least annually. ๐
Jack hammer
excavating words
digs silence
๐๐๐ป CES ๐๐ป๐ ~ thanks!
Palpably dark, very vivid.
๐ค๐๐ป Dolly ๐๐ป๐ค
love how some words can be made to dance, with each other too, and these do that, and try to dodge each other in cunning ways ๐
Wow, Emma! Your kind comment is practically poetry itselfโฃ๏ธ
~David
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