Windows, or: Fourth dimension

A waltmarie

Comprised of 5 consecutive American sentences

A chilly breeze blows across the apartment through large, open
windows.
We find ourselves observing the shifting seasons, passengers
through time.
Our senses tingle at winter's birth, our bare hands; noses; tongues...
our eyes.
The frailty of bare trees and wind's colors are almost hard to
look at.
The crisp air will warm next spring; but now, in autumn, it recalls
the past.

The waltmarie

Created as a nonce by Candace Kubinec.

  • 10 lines
  • Even lines are two syllables in length, odd lines are longer (but no specific syllable count)
  • Even lines make their own mini-poem if read separately

No other rules for subject or rhymes.


The American sentence

Allen Ginsberg, inventor of the American Sentence, felt that the haiku didn’t work as well in English. Ginsberg decided to remove the line structure of the haiku, maintaining the requirement of 17 syllables total. He felt that removing the line count freed the American Sentence up for the idiosyncrasies of English phonemes.

The requirements:

  1. Composed in one line;
  2. Syllabic, 17 syllables;
  3. Condensed, written with no unnecessary words or articles;
  4. Complete sentence or sentences;
  5. Includes a turn or enlightenment.

d’Verse Open Link Night

I am sharing this poem for today’s d’Verse OLN; it’s an example of my playing around with forms – as you can see, I combined two existing forms to create a third one. Actually, this particular merged poetic form is one that I’ve used several times because it feels very natural to me.


Let’s write poetry together!

When it comes to partnership, some humans can make their lives alone – it’s possible. But creatively, it’s more like painting: you can’t just use the same colours in every painting. It’s just not an option. You can’t take the same photograph every time and live with art forms with no differences.

Ben Harper (b. 1969)

Would you like to create poetry with me and have a completed poem of yours featured here at the Skeptic’s Kaddish? I am very excited to have launched the ‘Poetry Partners’ initiative and am looking forward to meeting and creating with you… Check it out!

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