True love, or: Simulacrum

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Poetry Partners #175

‘Does He Love Me?’, a ‘Quadrenz’ by Kaci Rigney

Does he try to
love me, or does
it come to him
like a calming breeze?

I wonder, does he
try to love me
or is it a
mystery?—beautiful and sweet

Do sparks fly with
simple smiles or touch?
Does he sport, or
love me with abandon?

Longing for us through
hours and minutes like
I do. Does he,
my lover, love me?

An ‘Atom Poem’ by ben Alexander of ‘The Skeptic’s Kaddish’

love's
natural-
let go

it is a
mystery
to all

but it
is never
put on

it's in
a tender
smile

Let’s write poetry together!

When it comes to partnership, some humans can make their lives alone – it’s possible. But creatively, it’s more like painting: you can’t just use the same colours in every painting. It’s just not an option. You can’t take the same photograph every time and live with art forms with no differences.

–Ben Harper (b. 1969)

Would you like to create poetry with me and have a completed poem of yours featured here at the Skeptic’s Kaddish? I am very excited to have launched the ‘Poetry Partners’ initiative and am looking forward to meeting and creating with you… Check it out!

List of Poetry Partners

56 thoughts on “True love, or: Simulacrum”

  1. Reading through Kacie’s love story
    Is a sure reminder to me, how playing in the meadows when we were young and plucking those daisy petals humming “He loves me, he loves me not” stays with us in deeper musing throughout our adult lives. I love the gentleness with which she reflects on each petal/question before she plucks.
    And in the end returning to the same question 🌿Does he, my lover, love me?🌿 which sparked the initial inquiry.

    🌿it’s in a tender smile🌿
    And then you sculptured love so lovely David.

    Excellent work from both of you.

          2. I can’t remember where I saw it. Sorry. But the Bop poem has three stanzas sextet, octet, sextet with a refrain between and at the end. State the problem in the first stanza, (refrain) expound on the problem in the second stanza, (refrain) solve the problem or fail solving in the third (refrain)
            No meter, no rhyme. 🙂

          4. Ooo thank you
            Technically quite demanding.
            Although no meter or rhyme should help.😊
            Thank you for sharing. I suppose one should work on the refrain first?

          9. I will surely do. I only see your reply now. My mailbox is giving me problems. Thank you. Have a lovely Tuesday.

  4. Love is a beautiful thing, it’s best when you don’t overthink it! Just live it. Well written by both of you.

  12. Woohoo! A Quadrenz!! And both poems are quite the pair – one from a woman’s point of view and the other easily a man’s POV! I can relate to Kaci’s questioning (I’ve done my share) and your relaxed assurance (which as I’ve aged has been my mantra)… Both so engaging and well done!!

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