A poetic triptych
I. “High” (a triolet)
Pass it... over... take... a long puff You'll... get high... faster if you cough Damn, Dude... you... got the real good stuff Pass... it over... take... a long puff Uhm... Bro... I think you've had enough Guys, looks like we have got liftoff! Pass... it over... take... a long puff You'll... get high... faster if you cough
II. “Light” (a triolet)
Time. moves. so. slow. My. head's. so. light. I'll. just. sit. right. down. here. and. chill. Hey. Man. this. so. fa. feels. all. right. Time. moves. so. slow. My. head's. so. light. Yo. what. if. lights. were. dark. not. bright? What. was. that. noise? What. noise? Stay. still. Time. moves. so. slow. My. head's. so. light. I'll. just. sit. right. down. here. and. chill.
III. “Highlight” (a triolet)
Can't wait till I get to Chuck's place. His roommate's always got strong weed. It blows you into outer space. Can't wait till I get to Chuck's place. Hope he's forgotten 'bout that vase. Or that time when his car got keyed. Can't wait till I get to Chuck's place. His roommate's always got strong weed.
d’Verse poetry prompt
At d’Verse, poets are encouraged to choose ONE of these threesomes:
- Sun; moon, earth
- Godhead Trinity/God/Father, Jesus/Son, Holy Spirit
- Yin, yang, oneness
OR Choose ONE of these compound words with the derivatives:
- Body, guard, bodyguard
- Dragon, fly, dragonfly
- Free, lance, freelance
- High, light, highlight
- Rain, bow, rainbow
We are writing without any set rule for rhyme or meter:
- A poem with THREE separate and distinct stanzas
- Each stanza numbered or subtitled with the reference word
- Include the reference word within the stanza if not subtitled
A Triolet is a poetic form consisting of only 8 lines. Within a Triolet, the 1st, 4th, and 7th lines repeat, and the 2nd and 8th lines do as well. The rhyme scheme is simple: ABaAabAB, capital letters representing the repeated lines.
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47 thoughts on “High ‘n light, or: Highlight”
Love where you took this, David! Exceptional. ❤️
💙🙏🏻 Punam 🙏🏻💙
A very original take on a classic form… great
💗🙏🏻 thanks, Björn 🙏🏻💗
Yes, a good trip, David. I’ve never been high on drugs though we had plenty of chances back in the 60’s and early 70’s. You wrote the experiences well.
Oh yes, if it had been legal back in my day, I would have tried pot.
🖤🙏🏻 Jim 🙏🏻🖤 ~ wow; I’m amazed anyone got through the sixties without trying it
A unique take, David. It makes me think of some old comedy routines–maybe Cheech and Chong? 😂
💝 😜 Merril 😜 💝
Brilliant! They read and sound so good. High without the weed. 🙂
❤️🙏🏻 Terveen 🙏🏻❤️ ~ thanks!
Phew! 😲 I guess I’ll never know what my verse – form ever is. But.much.to.learn. uh.
darkness. were. light. what.if. we. each. knew.our.form.were. light. what.would.darkness.do🌻
An interesting question, Rayla! ❤
BTW – why do you have to know what your “form” is?
or even – why do you have to have one?
for example I use lots of forms – few people stick to only one…
Its never occurred to me. When I see verse forms here, am stoked🤗
There’s ppl like me that stammer thru, tho’ yeah, blissful ignorance of form.
Some find it hard to understand my lines, but then am mostly mumbling in my chin. To be understood is a miracle😅
a terrific trip through this trio of triolets David- love the voice asides in the last stanza
💝🙏🏻 Laura 🙏🏻💝 ~ thanks for the prompt!