For the umpteenth time, Jack sent contrite verse, But to excuses Jill had grown much averse; He'd changed since hitting his crown, Swinging his pail around town... She'd come to yearn for a man loyal and terse!
What do you see #177
For WDYS #177, Sadje invites us to write a piece inspire by the above image of a piece of paper that’s scorched at the top. The intact part shows the following text:
Love is patient.
Love is kind.
It does not envy or boast.
It’s not proud, rude, or self-seeking.
It is not easily angry and keeps no record of past mistakes.
It does not delight in evil.
It rejoices in the truth.
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When it comes to partnership, some humans can make their lives alone – it’s possible. But creatively, it’s more like painting: you can’t just use the same colours in every painting. It’s just not an option. You can’t take the same photograph every time and live with art forms with no differences.–Ben Harper (b. 1969)
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50 thoughts on “To fetch a pail of water, or: Tumbling after”
🤍🙏🏻 Punam 🙏🏻🤍
[…] David; To fetch a pail of water or tumbling after […]
Cleverly written, David
💙🙏🏻 Nicole 🙏🏻💙 ~ thanks so much
An amusing take. Well done. :):)
❤ 🙂 Indira 🙂 ❤ ~ thanks so much!
My pleasure, dear.
The title alone made me smile..this is brilliant😊
💛🙏🏻 Mich 🙏🏻💛 ~ thanks!
❤ 🙂 D. A. 🙂 ❤ ~ thanks so much!
🧡🙏🏻 Dolly 🙏🏻🧡 ~ thanks
Great fun poem for the prompt David! ❣️
❤️🙏🏻 Cindy 🙏🏻❤️ ~ thank you!
Always David! 👏
As a reader, I can’t help but feel a tinge of sympathy for Jack, who seems to be trying his best to win back Jill’s affection. However, as the limerick progresses, it becomes clear that Jill has had enough of Jack’s apologies and is looking for someone who is more reliable and sincere. The line “She’d come to yearn for a man loyal and terse!” is particularly telling, as it suggests that Jill is tired of Jack’s empty words and is seeking a partner who is dependable and straightforward.
At the same time, I can also see Jack’s perspective. It can be difficult to change old habits and patterns of behavior, especially if they have become ingrained over time. Jack may genuinely want to be a better partner to Jill, but his efforts may not be enough to overcome her growing frustration and disappointment.
Overall, this limerick offers a humorous but poignant commentary on the complexities of romantic relationships. It reminds us that love requires not just words, but also actions, and that true loyalty and commitment are essential ingredients for lasting happiness. Thank you, for sharing this limerick with us. 👍👏👌😊
❤ 🙂 Pankaj 🙂 ❤ ~ that is an amazing and spot-on analysis – WOW!
I’m glad to hear that my analysis was helpful and resonated with you. It’s always great to know that my insights have made a positive impact. Thank you, David, for your kind words of appreciation! 😊