lumpy gastropod blankets stretched across rain-beaten stones; foolish innocents upon pavement, grass too wet to travel; crushed shell fragments smeared in raw snail flesh shatter children's innocence.
A Korean verse form related to haiku and tanka and comprised of three lines of 14-16 syllables each, for a total of 44-46 syllables. Each line contains a pause near the middle, similar to a caesura, though the break need not be metrical. The first half of the line contains six to nine syllables; the second half should contain no fewer than five. Originally intended as songs, sijo can treat romantic, metaphysical, or spiritual themes. Whatever the subject, the first line introduces an idea or story, the second supplies a “turn,” and the third provides closure. Modern sijo are sometimes printed in six lines.
For Tanka Tuesday, Colleen encourages us to write syllabic poems using synonyms of the two following words (but not the words themselves):
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57 thoughts on “Innocents, or: Age of innocence”
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Aw, poor snails! Great poem, David!
Yvette M Calleiro 🙂
🖤🙏🏻 Yvette 🙏🏻🖤 ~ thanks!
💙🙏🏻 Jude 🙏🏻💙 ~ thank you so much
💗🙏🏻 Sara 🙏🏻💗 ~ thanks!
💓🙏🏻 Molly 🙏🏻💓
Yuck… poor innocents, poor snail.
💖🙏🏻 Debi 🙏🏻💖 ~ I agree…. thanks
David, you ended this with a poignant punch. Outstanding!
💚🙏🏻 Michele 🙏🏻💚 ~ thank you so much
Poor little fellow… These sad moments do happen though, and experiencing them is a part of maturing.
💙🙏🏻 Nicole 🙏🏻💙 ~ exactly on both accounts
A gripping drama unfolds in the microcosm. Well-done, David.
That is a completely different sort of poem from the prompt! I love the imagination, David.
💕🙏🏻 Luanne 🙏🏻💕 ~ thanks; what do you mean by completely different from the prompt?
I worded that badly. I mean completely different from what someone typically might pull from the prompt–green spring and flowers and all that!
Snail death so dramatically pictured – no wonder children were disturbed!
🖤🙏🏻 Muri 🙏🏻🖤
Great poem and poetry form.
💝🙏🏻 Arcadia 🙏🏻💝 ~ thanks!