close eyes tune noises out steady my breathing zoom inward shift into first gear roll forward second gear take it slowly around the ridges third gear into the grooves fourth across synapses fifth sixth accelerating into somewhere far beyond myself entirely where creativity reigns
The most intricate Japanese Poetry form is the Choka, or Long Poem. The early form consisted of a series of katauta joined together. This gives a choice of form structures of 5/7/5/5/7/7… etc., or: 5/7/7/5/7… etc.
The Choka could be any total line length and indeed many exceeded 100 lines. Looking at this, it is easy to see why Poetic Historians believe the katauta is the original basic unit of Japanese poetry using either the 17 or 19 unit onji.
The above choka is my take on d’Verse’s Quadrille challenge.
The Quadrille is simply a poem of 44 words (excluding the title), and it can take any form. This week’s challenge was to use the word “shift” in a Quadrille.
Let’s write poetry together!
When it comes to partnership, some humans can make their lives alone – it’s possible. But creatively, it’s more like painting: you can’t just use the same colours in every painting. It’s just not an option. You can’t take the same photograph every time and live with art forms with no differences.–Ben Harper (b. 1969)
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37 thoughts on “Fifth, Sixth, or: Beyond”
I really love how the words flow together, the gears separated by the lines. It creates a very fluid poem I could hear moving forward.
💓🙏🏻 Bridgette 🙏🏻💓 ~ that’s what I was going for!
Nicely done quadrille.
🧡🙏🏻 Arcadia 🙏🏻🧡 ~ thanks!