A ‘Garland’ Shadorma
please don't pre- empt your conception of thorny ideas before taking a moment to reflect on them do you con- tend you can under- take the most difficult challenges put before you? what of poetry? challenging for people to with- stand all con- tradictions put before them on journeys from birth to decease do you feel simply overwhelmed with the pre- cepts and ex- igencies of this mortal coil to which we're bound? lately, I have been wondering: how does one avoid in- tensive, infernally con- centrated hardships? expression through verse, tortuous though such may be, provides release and respite from dumb- founding conundrums please don't pre- tend you can under- stand all con- cepts and ex- tensive, infernally con- founding conundrums
The ‘Garland’ Shadorma was created by Sylvia Cognac, modeled after the ‘Garland’ Cinquain. Essentially, it is a Shadorma series of seven stanzas, with the seventh and final stanza being composed of lines from all six previous stanzas.
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62 thoughts on “Prefix, or: Excursus”
Beautifully written, David 💫👏✨
❤️🙏🏻 Navin 🙏🏻❤️ ~ thank you
You’re welcome, David ✨💟💫
I don’t. ❤️
🧡🙏🏻 Punam 🙏🏻🧡 ~ I know
You are the best! ❤️🤗
Excellent! I love this form. 💜
💞🙏🏻 Colleen 🙏🏻💞
I should have said you did a great job.
I should have said thank you 😉
LOL! You’re always welcome.
This is the second time I read this. I’m still very curious about the use of “infernal”. You have such strong word control that I know you did this on purpose.
Mark, what do you mean, exactly?
“Infernal” is like “hellish”, isn’t it?
Also, according to the dictionary, the common, informal definition is: “irritating and tiresome (used for emphasis).” – for example, in the sentence: “you’re an infernal nuisance”
So, if a hardship is intensive and infernally concentrated, as I attempted (maybe poorly) to describe it… it’s very, very very difficult and even overwhelming in how heavily it bears down upon one…
I guess I was picturing an infernal person in the narrator’s world.
well, the word in the poem is a descriptor for “hardships”, but people can certainly cause or even be hardships for one another…
are you asking what kind of hardships other people have caused me that would lead me to describe them as infernal?
I love this ❤️
💛🙏🏻 Sylvia 🙏🏻💛 ~ I’m so glad 😊
Wonderful work David!! 🙂 I invite you to come read my OLN offering tonight on my site — and to experience my wife Kathy’s profound love affair with nature, which is currently hampered by her newly discovered cancer. She goes into the UW Fred Hutch Cancer Center April 22nd for a multi-hour regimen of robotics surgery on her neck and throat area. Post Op will put her in ICU for Four days. Please keep Kathy, my love, in your thoughts. Thank you… ✌🏼🕊🏼❣️
😰 Rob 😰 ~ you and Kathy are always in my thoughts
✍please don’t pre- tend you can under- stand all con- cepts and ex- tensive, infernally con- founding conundrums✍
It’s far to heavy a burden to fool oneself
Sit back and listen to others
A messenger always arrives
This is a promise.
💟 🙏🏻 Abi 🙏🏻 💟
✍expression through verse, tortuous though such may be, provides release and respite from dumb- founding conundrums✍
I believe you.
Work of art has an array of meanings
So too the reader, by the the poetic fire we are refined.
💗🙏🏻 Abi 🙏🏻💗
✍lately, I have been wondering: how does one avoid in- tensive, infernally con- centrated hardships?✍
We were born to dance
And beat the drum
Tap our feet and sway our hips
Play the music and dance
💖🙏🏻 Abi 🙏🏻💖 ~ beautiful 🎵
💖💖, thank you 💞
✍do you feel simply overwhelmed with the pre- cepts and ex- igencies of this mortal coil to which we’re bound?✍
A lot of times, yet we must persevere and withstand
We can only leave this mortal body at the appointed time.
💓🙏🏻 Abi 🙏🏻💓 ~ I feel this piece has struck a chord with you…
💗💗, Indeed it has Poet.
✍challenging for people to with- stand all con- tradictions put before them on journeys from birth to decease ✍
Guilty, and aching for breaking and not trusting God in difficult times, when in fact He is my rock.
💞🙏🏻 Abi 🙏🏻💞
💞💞, thank you.