This is now, or: That was then

A poem in ‘Line Messaging’ form

she pronounces the words correctly
for the most part
but that's not what most impresses me
it's her comprehension skills

educational software for kids
draws them in 
with virtual worlds, games, graphics
they've markedly improved

internet access itself
has been such a massive game changer
she's learned more than I ever did 
at her age
even since just yesterday

of course I want the best for my baby
want her to be empowered,
informed, capable, aware; but
increasingly... I worry
she's growing up too damn fast

Moonwashed weekly prompt #140


d’Verse: The ‘Line Messaging’ form

At d’Verse, poets are encouraged to write poems in the ‘Line Messaging’ form:

‘Line Messaging’

Line Messaging is a poetry form wherein the last line of each stanza represents an overall idea. So, if the last lines of every stanza are read together (separately from the poem), they will produce a message or a poem on their own.

The last lines of the stanzas of the poem above produce the following micropoem:

it's her comprehension skills
they've markedly improved
even since just yesterday
she's growing up too damn fast

Let’s write poetry together!

When it comes to partnership, some humans can make their lives alone – it’s possible. But creatively, it’s more like painting: you can’t just use the same colours in every painting. It’s just not an option. You can’t take the same photograph every time and live with art forms with no differences.

Ben Harper (b. 1969)

Would you like to create poetry with me and have a completed poem of yours featured here at the Skeptic’s Kaddish? I am very excited to have launched the ‘Poetry Partners’ initiative and am looking forward to meeting and creating with you… Check it out!

50 thoughts on “This is now, or: That was then”

  1. I love this style and will give it a try soon. Yep, they grow up too fast. Seems my parents said the same thing about me. Brilliant writing, David!

  2. This perfectly encapsulates the worry of every parent in this modern age, but I take comfort in the fact that every generation probably thought their kids would be ruined by something, I think there was a moral panic over heavy metal music in the 80โ€™s

  3. The message is clear, David, and I recognise that situation โ€“ I had it with my daughter and now Iโ€™m seeing it all over again with my five-year-old grandson! He has a childrenโ€™s Kindle with all sorts of educational games on it, which he loves. He has flown through the ones for his age and beyond.

  4. A timely, well-penned poem, David. Todayโ€™s children and young adults have grown up with the world available at the touch of fingers on a keypad. And so much of whatโ€™s available is garbageโ€”or worse. Innocence lostโ€ฆ.๐Ÿ’œ

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