Two ‘Shadorma’ poems in a ‘Cleave’
|the effort||it takes me|
|to transport myself||far enough away|
|to escape||from this stress|
|faithful ideals of a||child freely dancing, sure of|
|Papa’s commitment||love and full support|
How to read a cleave poem?
- Read the left hand poem as a first discrete poem.
- Read the right hand poem as a second discrete poem.
- Read the whole as a third integrated poem.
- The Shadorma is a Spanish poetic form made up of a stanza of six lines with no set rhyme scheme (rhyme is optional);
- It is a syllabic poem with a meter of 3/5/3/3/7/5;
- It can have many stanzas, as long as each follows the meter.
For Tanka Tuesday, Colleen encourages us to incorporate synonyms of both ‘work’ and ‘play’ into syllabic poems.
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57 thoughts on “Work to live, or: Live to work”
And truly what an effort it takes to be a loving parent.
Enough joy makes it appear easy though! 😉
💗🙏🏻 Jules 🙏🏻💗
This cleave poem looks so effortless– love it!
💕🙏🏻 Sarah 🙏🏻💕
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Great job combining the forms. I love how the complexity increases by doing that! I also know the cleave as a contrapuntal poem and thought of doing it, but it is, of course, more complicated!!!
❤ 🙂 Luanne 🙂 ❤ ~ thanks!
Writing a cleave as a contrapuntal is an even greater accomplishment!
I misspelled your name in my comment, but I just fixed it! Sorry!
No worries. So many people make that mistake!
Very nicely done, David.
💟 🙏🏻 Roberta 🙏🏻 💟 ~ thanks!
You did an amazing job with the prompt, my friend!
🤍🙏🏻 M Jay 🙏🏻🤍 ~ merçi beaucoup
Endearing conjoining of the two archetypes
Father and Child
💗🙏🏻 Abi 🙏🏻💗
Wow, that’s impressive David. Bravo!!
💞🙏🏻 Gwen 🙏🏻💞
Amazingly seamless fusion of two parts.
💖🙏🏻 Dolly 🙏🏻💖 ~ merçi beaucoup
The pleasure, is mine, David.
Wow! Well done, David. These two poems go together so well!
🤎🙏🏻 Colleen 🙏🏻🤎
This cleave is so seamless! Such a delight to read!!!!
💛🙏🏻 Muri 🙏🏻💛
love this David!
Great Job with my favorite the Cleave poem I learned from you.. ❣️
And therein lies the question.
I used to live to eat and know i eat to live TG!
The life thing is a great one.. balance is the key~!
💚🙏🏻 Cindy 🙏🏻💚 ~ thank you so much; I agree!
You’re so welcome David!!! ❣️